Peer Evaluation

For 20321


Grade

According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?

I think this essay deserves a four. There is basic research to support some ideas.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?

I hope there are more fresh research for confirmation. The reasons are almost what people naturally know.

Thesis

What is the thesis?

Internet real name system should be enforced.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?

Yes and yes.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?

I think I would also agree with him.

Any other thoughts?

This is interesting. It will be difficult to refute the opposite opinion because there are also many people who don't agree with him with clear reasons.

Classical Argument

Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?

I can't find refutation clearly.There is a brief mention that  " all I'm saying is in the case of Korea, and internet anonymity became effective in 2007, however it ceased because of some citizen's complaint. " but I think it should be supported with more reasons.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?

I could read the introduction well because it was prevalent problem. Also it comfortably lead to the thesis.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

Yes, the definitions are really clear and it was easy to understand his essay for narration. However I hope there is no refutation in narration.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?

I think most of it adequately support the thesis but it needs more persuasive data to support them.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?

No.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?

Yes.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

The narration is nonexistent or inadequate.

When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I agreed with the thesis.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?

I still agree with the thesis.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?

I did not change my mind.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

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Research

Is the author using research effectively?

Yes

Is the research from appropriate sources?

Yes, although none of them are from academic research.

Are the sources obvious?

Yes, the sources are obvious.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?

Usually.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?

No.